Kwela Nobela : Chapters 42 - 43

Short Film Coming : Negative One
" Ang Pagbabalik "
Chapter 38

(other location)
(Anton's house)

< Dad > : saan ka galing?
< Anton > : (no response)
< Dad > : Anton kinakausap kita
< Anton > : (binuksan lang yung TV)
< Dad > : (pinatay TV)
< Anton > : buksan mo, nanonood ako
< Dad > : alam mo ba to? (binato kay Anton yung mga sulat)
< Anton > : malay ko dito, wala akong alam
< Dad > : over speeding ticket, na naman! saka reklamo galing kay Mrs. Rio, pinilay mo daw aso nya ng motorsiklo mo
< Anton > : kasalanan ko bang hindi marunong umilag aso nun … kasalanan pa nga nya eh, pinapabayaang, nakakalat lang
< Dad > : hindi yun Anton eh, hindi yun … pano ko ba ipaiintindi sayo na sa buhay, may responsabilidad tayo sa bawat aksyon na ginagawa natin
< Anton > : hah--- (nagtakip ng unan)
< Dad > : papano kung hindi aso lang yung binundol mo, papano kung Van, o malaking truck nasa harapan mo na! hindi iilag sayo yun, ang bilis mo pa man din magmaneho
< Anton > : … (tumayo kinuha yung susi)
< Dad > : Anton! hindi pa ko tapos makipag-usap sayo! bumalik ka nga dito!
< Anton > : … (sumakay sa motorbike nya at umalis)
< Dad > : …

(other location)
(Christoper's house)

< Christoper > : good, luto na (kinuha cake sa oven)
< Anton > : (nagdidikdik ng droga)
< Christoper > : pwede na yan, ihalo mo na sa cake
< Anton > : … hindi na ba natin uubusin yung isang plastic?
< Christoper > : hindi na, tama na yan sa ngayon … ikaw na rin magtago nyan, nakakagamit kasi ako ng isang plastic
< Anton > : gumagamit ka rin nito?
< Christoper > : tumitikim lang ako
< Anton > : Tupe, isang supot nauubos mo, hindi tikim yun
< Christoper > : kaya nga ikaw na magtago kulit … pwede na yan
< Anton > : (tinuloy na pagbe-bake) buti nakakatagal ka pa, pinaaaprubahan pa ng Daddy ko to sa BFAD
< Mom's voice > : Christoper! nasan ang gunting! panggugupit ko sa makapal na bed cover!
< Christoper > : ginagamit namin dito Ma! punta kayo dito para gupitin ko! (hawak ang gunting)
< Mom's voice > : wag na! gagamitin ko na lang ngipin ko!
< Anton > : … nasan ba Mama mo? hanggang ngayon, lumaki tayong boses lang nya naririnig natin
< Christoper > : (ewan ko gesture) … wala akong ideya kung nasan Mama ko … lumaki na lang ako na may pagkain na lang lagi sa lamesa tuwing pagkagising
< Anton > : ninja, ninja Mama mo
< Christoper > : ninja---!!!
< Mom's voice > : di ba pinalilinisan ko sayo yung mga electric fan! ha Christoper!
< Christoper > : nilinisan ko na ah! kahapon!
< Mom's voice > : kailan mo ginawa? eh ang dumi-dumi pa netong isa!
< Christoper > : kahapon! naglinis ako ng mga yan!
< Mom's voice > : sinabon mo bang mga to!?
< Christoper > : hinde
< Mom's voice > : di ba sabi ko sasabunin mo dapat! gusto mong ikaw sabunin ko! linisan mo ulit tong mga to narinig mo!
< Christoper > : (mahinang boses) mukha mo sabon
< Mom's voice > : anong binubulong-bulong mo dyan
< Christoper > : sabi ko wala na tayong pangsabon! ubos na!
< Mom's voice > : bumili ka sa tindahan pagkatapos mo dyan! kunin mo sa lamesa yung pera!
< Christoper > : gusto ko sa inyo ko kukunin yung pera!
< Mom's voice > : ang arte mo! sa lamesa! dun mo kunin ang pera!
< Anton > : … (tinignan yung oven)
< Christoper > : maluluto na ba?
< Anton > : mamaya pa … ba't nga pala natin to ginagawa kay Rex?
< Christoper > : basta lang
< Anton > : etong sobra wala akong hinalo
< Christoper > : tara kainin na natin
< Anton > : baka yung Mama mo gusto rin
< Christoper > : Ma! may cake kaming niluto dito, sabay na tayong kumain!
< Mom's voice > : sige! ilagay mo lang dyan
< Christoper > : sabay na tayo, hintayin na kita!
< Mom's voice > : kakain din ako mamaya! kumain ka na!
< Christoper > : (angry face then eat)

(other location)
(neighbor's house)

< Christoper > : … (kinakapa mukha nya ng matanda)
< Lola > : ikaw pala anak ni Tonya huh?
< Christoper > : opo
< Lola > : buti naman dinidisiplina ka ng nanay mo, mabuti yan … pero mabait na bata yan si Tonya dati kaso, hindi ko man lang nahawakan ang mukha para makilala
< Christoper > : ah La, totoo po bang may ketong kayo?
< Lola > : ketong? wala akong ketong, bulag lang ako
< Christoper > : hindi kayo nakakarinig?
< Lola > : hindi ako nakakakita Diyos ko! ereng batang to Diyos ko, kanina pa tayo nag-uusap
< Christoper > : … ang iniisip ko bata pa kayong tignan pero nagkamali ako, mas bata pa pala kayo sa personal
< Lola > : ay wag mo na kong bolahin bata ka, ginagalit mo lang ako
< Christoper > : totoo … paglaki ko nga at nag-asawa ako, gusto ko kasing ganda nyo ngayon
< Lola > : lokolokong batang ere, tatay mo siguro scientist, manang-mana sa pag-iimbento ng sinasabe … ay naku
< Christoper > : chess tayo Lola, naglalaro kayo ng chess di ba
< Lola > : ano!
< Christoper > : chess tayo, may chess ba kayo dito?
< Lola > : ano bang … alam mo bang impusibleng sinasabi mo, ay naku, may problema ka iho, walang gamot dyan baka akala mo
< Christoper > : chess tayo, sabi ni Mama nag-world champion daw kayo sa international chess competition
< Lola > : bulag ako iho bulag ako, bulag na ko simula pagkapanganak ko … so papanong makakapaglaro ako ng chess!? aber … wag mo na nga akong kulitin, magsimula ka nang maglinis sige na
< Christoper > : … (naghahanap, walang makita) lalabas lang ako sandale kukuha lang ng chess, babalik ako agad
< Lola > : hoy bata ka! nag-iimbento ka para lang pala takasan ako! wala ka pang nagagawang trabaho bumalik ka dito!
< Christoper's voice > : babalik po agad ako! kukuha ng chess!

--- end of Chapter 38 ---

Short Film Coming : Negative One
" Ang Pagbabalik "
Chapter 39

(other location)
(Anton's house)
(late at night … dumating na si Anton)

< Dad > : san ka galeng? gabing-gabi na ah
< Anton > : matutulog na ko (diretso sa kwarto)
< Dad > : hindi pa ko tapos sayo! bumalik ka dito!
(Anton's room)
< Anton > : … (nakahiga sa kama)
< Dad > : … Anton, hindi ko na alam ang dapat gawin sayo … binabali wala mo lang lahat ng pag-aalala ko
< Anton > : (nagtakip ng unan)
< Dad > : di ba, lagi mong itinatanong dati sa kin kung nasan ang Mommy mo?
< Anton > : wala na kong pakialam na sa kanya, matutulog na ko gusto ko nang matulog
< Dad > : Anton, hindi totoo na sinabi kong nawawala Mommy mo … in fact, gusto ka nyang makita ngayon
< Anton > : ..?
< Dad > : (binuksan yung pinto)
(may pumasok na babaeng malaki at mukhang maton)
< Anton > : …
< Mom > : eto ba anak natin?
< Dad > : Anton, sya Mommy mo, kapaparol lang nya galing sa bilangguan
< Mom > : (hinawakan damit sa ilalim ng leeg ni Anton) walang anak ko ang magmumukhang ganito! simula ngayon, maraming magbabago ngayon naiintindihan mo!
< Anton > : (natatakot) Dad, Mommy ko ba talaga sya?
< Dad > : (nodding yes)
< Anton > : hi, Ma

(other location)
(daylight)
(school gate)

< Rex > : sabi nung doktor sa tiyo ko, meron akong good news at bad news sayo … ano po yun? tanong ng tiyo ko … sinabi naman nung doktor, ang good news ay, meron ka na lang 24 hours para mabuhay … sumigaw yung tiyo ko, oh my God! totoo po ba yon!? eh ano po yung bad news pa dyan? … sumagot yung doktor, ang bad news ay, tinatawagan ka na namin simula pa kahapon
< Christoper > : (napangite)
(dumating si Elvis)
< Elvis > : nakadaan ka na ba sa first floor hallway Christoper?
< Christoper > : hindi pa
< Rex > : bakit anong meron?
< Elvis > : ang baho sobra … sabi nung ibang pumasok, puro may tae daw lahat ng dingding sa loob ng kubeta
< Rex > : ano!? hala!
< Christoper > : kanina lang ba?
< Elvis > : nasuspended ka kasi eh … last week pa yata nagsimula, kahit nililinisan daw, mayamaya may mga taeng nakakalat ulit sa loob nung kubeta … malapit pa man din sa canteen
< Rex > : (natawa) sino daw may pakana?
< Elvis > : wala pa nga daw nahuhule eh
< Rex > : talaga?
< Elvis > : oo nga pala Christoper, may assignment ba tayo sa English?
< Christoper > : hindi naman ako gumagawa ng assignment
< Elvis > : … buti pa si Anton, may alam kapag may assignment
< Christoper > : magkaklase ba kayo sa ibang subject?
< Elvis > : isa
< Rex > : speaking of Anton, napapansin ko Tupe, iba na yung mga titig mo kay Anton ngayon ah
< Christoper > : uy usapang lalake gusto ko to
< Elvis > : (awkward face)
< Rex > : alam mo pare hindi kita masisisi, yung appeal naman kasi ni Anton makalaglag panty eh
< Christoper > : nakakalaway di ba, si Anton
< Rex > : kahit kapag natatapik ako ng manggas ng damit nya, naku
< Christoper > : ay naku
< Rex > : naku kinikilig-kilig ako
< Elvis > : … anong, nangyayare
< Rex > : ikaw Elvis, magkwento ka naman tungkol sa inyo ni Anton
< Elvis > : (nagkamot ng ulo) … ano, minsan, naghihiraman kami ng mga notes ni Anton
< Christoper > : exchanging notes? ayos yan
< Rex > : nabasa ko sa teenager magazine, pagkatapos ng exchanging notes, exchanging love letters na kasunod
< Christoper > : nakakainggit ka naman, kulang-kulang kasi notes ko kaya hindi ako pinapansin ni Anton
< Rex > : ano bang pinagsasasabi mo, eh lately ikaw tong mas “bestfriend” (quotation gesture) ni Anton kaysa sa kin
< Christoper > : hindi totoo yan
< Rex > : ikaw tong mas “close”, kay Anton pagdating sa mga pribadong mga lakad nyo
< Christoper > : wala akong alam sa mga sinasabi mo
< Rex > : hindi nyo man lang ako sinasama sa mga lakad ninyong dalawa
< Christoper > : wala akong sasabihin kasi walang nangyayare okey … pero kung pipilitin nyo ko okey sige
< Rex > : (pinisil bewang ni Christoper)
< Christoper > : (natawa) ano ba---
< Rex > : ah-ah ang lan-di (pisil ulit)
< Christoper > : (natawa)
< Rex > : ang lan-di
< Christoper > : ang lan-di, graduate ng lan-di university
< Elvis > : (natawa)
< Christoper > : ikaw Elvis, mahal mo rin ba si Anton?
< Elvis > : … kung, ano siguro ang uso (then nod yes)
< Christoper > : I-kill-you
< Elvis > : (natawa)

--- end of Chapter 39 ---

From AUTHOR's Notes

< delay > : hello readers,

just post your
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kung meron kayong
sasabihin, good or bad

mas masaya sana kung tao
mga nagbabasa, hindi ghosts

" communication is good ... comments kayo "

Facts about Short Film Coming
# 2 ... meron akong naging kaklase dati na L.V.S. ang initials kaya ang tawag namin sa kanya, Elvis

# 3 ... I got the idea of this sketch nung nasa Don Bosco pa ko ... may kaibigan kasi akong nag-aaral sa vocational school din don tapos may teacher daw silang pari na sobrang gwapo daw ... lahat ng mga estudyante nya, tinatanong daw sa kanya kung bakit sya nagpari, nakakapanghinayang daw itsura nya
... anyway, dito ko na-apply yung kwento na yon

Originally Published on ...
- January 12, 2009

(outside the church)
(may naglalakad na pari papalayo sa background … hinabol ni Ann yung gwapung-gwapong binatang pari na may hawak na biblia)

< Ann > : (kinausap camera man) eto ba yon? eto ba yung sinasabi ng mga nagsisimba?
(sinabayan sa paglalakad)
< Ann > : um, excuse me po Father
< Priest > : ..?
< Ann > : totoo po pala sinasabi nila, ang gwapo-gwapo nyo po talaga
< Priest > : (natawa)
< Ann > : ang dapat sa inyo, naggi-girlfriend … naisip nyo po ba yon?
(they stop walking)
< Priest > : iha, ang misyon ko sa buhay, ay magpayo sa maraming nangangailangan na tao patungo sa mabuting landas, masaya na ko sa ganitong paraan
< Ann > : pero Father kung papipiliin lang po talaga kayo, kunwari lang, kunwari lang, ano po ang gusto nyo pong babae? may kakilala ako na super ganda gusto nyong …
< Priest > : (nangingite … naisip biruin si Ann) o sige teka … ang gusto ko sana six footer na babae (then natawa)
< Ann > : six footer na babae? walang problema, (may kinausap na iba) palapitin yan dito
< Priest > : ..?
(may lumapit na six footer na model na babae na naka-bikini … tumabi kay Father)
< Model > : (ngumiti kay Father)
< Ann > : maganda di ba?
< Priest > : pero gusto ko foreigner (natawa ulit)
< Ann > : meron din kami, meron din kami nun … palapitin yung foreigner
< Priest > : meron din kayo?
(may lumapit na foreigner model na babae na six footer din, nakasuot ng bikini … tumabi kay Father)
< Foreigner model > : (kiniss pisngi ni Father)
< Unang Model > : (kumiss din sa pisngi ni Father)
< Priest > : (natawa)
< Ann > : sabihin mo … ayoko nang, magpari, ayoko nang magpari sabihin mo, sige na po Father
< Priest > : (nangingite) … ang pinakagusto ko sana yung, tatlo mata, may kaliskis, tapos lumilipad
< Ann > : walang problema … sige, palapitin din yan
< Priest > : hala! meron din? (tingin naman)
< Ann > : wala … joke lang, syempre walang ganun … bakit sila? magaganda naman sila ah, di ba?
< Priest > : (tinignan yung mga model tapos natatawa … then agreeing yes)
< Models > : (tumawa rin)
< Ann > : so anong opinyon nyo muna po sa pulitika ngayon?
< Priest > : ah--- (then talk about the politics but muted, just talking gestures)
< Ann’s voice as Narrator > : ang masasabi ko, promote love
(print on screen … PROMOTE LOVE)
< Ann’s voice as Narrator > : … mas may payapa kapag ganito at sigurado, hindi na sya kristyano mamayang gabi, muwahahahahahahahaha

Short Film Coming : Negative One
" Ang Pagbabalik "
Chapter 40

< Christoper > : paunahan tayong dalawa Elvis kung sino unang makaka-score kay Anton
< Rex > : hello? tayong tatlo, tayong tatlo kaya, isama nyo naman ako sa mga pangarap ninyo
< Christoper > : wag ka na, mabantot ka eh
< Elvis > : hala!
< Rex > : ikaw … yung hininga mo lang naaamoy mo kapag nagsasalita ka
< Christoper > : kaya pala, kaya pala panay halik sa akin ni Anton, lips to lips
< Rex > : impusible, eh araw-araw kaming nagsasabay maligo ni Anton, sana may naikwento man lang sya sa kin habang pinapaliguan nya ko
< Christoper > : wag ka ngang sinungaleng
< Rex > : hindi ako sinungaling
< Christoper > : sinungaling ka
< Rex > : mamatay na sinungaling, ganun talaga kapag mas mahal ni Anton
< Christoper > : o talaga?
< Rex > : talaga
< Christoper > : ang kapal, ang kapal ng libag
< Rex > : makapal talaga libag ko
< Christoper > : (sinuntok bigla mukha ni Rex) tumigil ka na nga Rex! iniinit mo ulo ko eh!
< Rex > : aray! … eh sa mas mahal nga ako ni Anton! anong magagawa ko!
< Christoper > : (tinulak si Rex) kung nung mga bata tayo madalas pinagbibigyan kita pero ngayon hindi na! sa kin si Anton sa akin!
< Elvis > : (pumagitna) guys! guys! mga lalake lahat tayo dito, pag-usapan natin to ng maayos
< Rex > : naiinggit lang yan kasi sa kin binibigay ibang paboritong damit ni Anton eh
< Christoper > : mamatay ka na Rex wala kang alam, charity tawag dun huy … paganahin mo nga yang utak mo mag-isip-isip ka nga, palibhasa hindi ka nag-highschool
< Elvis > : (nangingiti lang)
< Rex > : hindi ko na kailangang mag-isip pa, nakikita ko naman kasi na mahal na mahal ako ni Anton ko, pinapakita nya sa kin araw-araw
< Christoper > : adik ka magshabu ka na lang
< Rex > : kami ni Anton oo

(dumating sila Ann at Mia)

< Mia > : si Anton ba pinag-uusapan ninyo?
< Christoper > : …
< Mia > : pang-apat na grupo na kayong naengkwentro namin ni Ann na pinag-uusapan si Anton ah
< Ann > : lahat nauwi sa away
< Elvis > : etong dalawa pagsabihan nyo, kanina pa
< Mia > : lately, gumagwapo daw si Anton sabi ni Ann
< Ann > : hala! (tinapik si Mia)
< Mia > : tumigil ka nga kunwari ka pa, inihulog mo pa nga ako sa hagdan nasabi ko lang na pinahiram ko ng calculator si Anton
< Ann > : eh kasi naman, nagdilim paningin ko bigla

(other location)
(inside the car)

< (close-up) Mom > : ayokong makikitang babaguhin mo yang ayos mo ah! ganyan ka na habang buhay! naiintindihan mo! sagot!
< Anton's voice > : pero ano na lang sasabihin ng mga kaibigan ko?
< (close-up) Mom > : gusto mo bang magulpi ulit kita! ha!
< Anton's voice > : okey okey, habang buhay nang ganito
< (close-up) Mom > : mabute! sasamahan na kita sa school gate mo

(other location)
(school gate)

< Everyone > : ..?
< Christoper > : dude, ano yang suot-suot mo?
(showing now Anton na naka-pink na damit na pambabae)
< Anton > : …
< Mom > : natutuwa talaga ako, lumaking naging maganda anak ko
< Everyone > : (smiling)
< Anton > : Mommy, hindi ako babae! nakakahiya tong pinagagawa nyo sa kin!
< Mom > : hoy Anton! baka nakalimutan mo na sinabi ko sayo! ano bang sinabi ko sayo, ha! sabihin mo!
< Anton > : … stop, pretending, na naging lalake ako
< Mom > : ano yon!? hindi kita narinig! … kayo, narinig nyo ba sya!?
< Everyone > : (nodding no)
< Christoper > : hindi po
< Anton > : pinanganak akong walang wangwang!!! yun ba gusto mong marinig!
< Mom > : mabuti naman alam mo! babae lang ang pwedeng maging anak sa pamilya ko, sa pamilya natin! kaya isuot mo na to! (giving Anton a feminine napkin)
< Anton > : Mommy!
< Mom > : ngayon na! at meron ka ngayon!
< Everyone > : (smiling)
< Anton > : (mahinang boses) stupid feminine napkin (kumuha ng isa tapos inilagay sa loob ng panty nya sa likod) … tapos na!
< Mom > : dyan ka ba dinadaluyan ng dugo!? ilagay mo sa harap! … umayos ka kung hinde
< Anton > : (galit na kinuha ulit yung napkin, tapos inilagay sa loob ng panty nya sa harap) yan! masaya ka na! protektado na ko ngayon sa regla!!!
< Mom > : mabuti naman!!! … alis na ko (then kiss Anton's cheek sabay alis na)
< Anton > : (mahinang boses) may Mommy nga ako, siraulo naman
< Mom's voice > : anong sinabi mo!?
< Anton > : ang sabi ko, may siraulo akong Mommy!!!
< Mom's voice > : ganun ba! mahal din kita!!!
< Everyone > : hahahaha...
< Christoper > : ang ganda mo ngayon Anton ah, gusto mong makipag-deyt sa kin?
< Anton > : tumigil ka na nga kung hinde
< Rex > : pare, papasok ka talagang nakaganyan?
< Anton > : ganun na nga, kapag hinubad ko to, bugbog sarado na naman ako … kaasar nga eh (nangangate)
< Mia > : pasok na tayo Ann mahuhuli na tayo
< Ann > : tara
< Rex > : sige pasok na kayo, uwi na ko (paalis na sana)
< Christoper > : … ah Rex
< Rex > : ..?
< Christoper > : tungkol nga pala sa higschool kanina, hindi ko, sinasadyang, sabihin yon
< Rex > : (no response)
< Christoper > : forgiveness?
< Rex > : forgiveness (smiling)
(then they hug)

--- end of Chapter 40 ---

Short Film Coming : Negative One
" Ang Pagbabalik "
Chapter 41

(other location)
(school)
(everyone is looking at Anton)

< Passerby > : gandang prom dress nyan ah
< Anton > : (angry face)
< Student > : saan debu party?
< Anton > : (nagtakip ng mukha)
(outside the classroom)
< Classmate > : bakit hindi mo dagdagan ng feathers malamig ngayon
< Anton > : (uppercut gesture)
(pumasok na lahat sa classroom except Ann)
< Ann > : (pinulot yung nalaglag na libro)
(lumabas teacher sa room)
< Teacher > : … o Anton, ano yang suot mo?
< Anton > : gusto ko nang mamatay (tapos pumasok na sa room)
< Ann > : (papasok na sana)
< Teacher > : ah Ann
< Everybody's voice inside the classroom > : (laughing loudly)
< Anton's voice > : shut up!
< Teacher > : Ann kausapin muna kita sandale
< Ann > : ano po yun Ma'am?
< Teacher > : gusto ko sanang humingi ng pabor sayo
< Ann > : pabor po?
< Teacher > : oo … oo sana … pwede bang, ayusan mo ko?
< Ann > : o sige po, ano po bang okasyon?
< Teacher > : yung ka-chat ko sa internet, mag-a-eye ball kami … nakakapressure nga kasi mahigit tatlong taon na kaming nagliligawan sa internet, gusto ko sanang mag-projek ng magandang first impression … ikaw lang kasi ang kakilala ko na mukhang alam ang dapat iayos eh … pasensya ka na
< Ann > : walang problema Ma'am, hindi po abala yun sa akin
< Teacher > : talaga? naku (happy)
< Ann > : I'm impress Ma'am, ngayon lang po ako nagkaroon ng kakilala na nagkaroon ng love life sa internet
< Teacher > : ang pinakamaganda na sigurong mangyayari eh, ito na magiging, mapapakasalan ko (tawa)
< Ann > : nice! that's great, nicely done Ma'am … ngayon, may pagkakataon na kayong hindi na maging virgin
< Teacher > : (awkward face) pero, hindi na ko virgin
< Ann > : o-key, “whatever” (doing quotation gestures)
< Teacher > : hindi na ko virgin hindi na ko virgin!
< Ann > : o-key, “whatever”
< Teacher > : totoo! tignan mo, ipapakita ko sayo (tapos naghuhubad ng palda)
< Ann > : o-key, “whatever”
< Teacher > : (naghubad talaga ng panty sa hallway)

(inside the classroom)

< Christoper > : ang ganda ng korona mo pare ah
< Anton > : tiara, tiara tawag dyan pare
< Mia > : ang landi nito
< Christoper > : ngayon, ang pangarap mong maging isang prinsesa natupad na
< Anton > : (natawa) kulang na lang, rainbow at unicorn para kumpleto na
< Mia > : ang landi Anton, bawasan ang kalandian
< Anton > : (cellphone gesture) hello animal control? may gumagalang black panther dito, pakihule
< Mia > : um! (pinalo si Anton)
< Christoper > : (cellphone gesture) Delta one to sniper, Delta one to sniper, pakibaril yung nakaitim, I repeat, yung nakaitim
< Mia > : ako ba pinariringgan mo!? hindi ako nakaitim leche ka!
< Christoper > : (cellphone gesture) yung magandang lalake, pakibaril
< Anton > : yung pogi
< Mia > : um! (pinalo si Anton)
< Anton > : aray!
< Mia > : ang kapal mo
< Anton > : ikaw Mia, anong pangarap mo sa buhay?
< Mia > : ako yung …
< Anton > : shut up!!! inaantok na ko! gusto ko nang matulog!
< Mia > : ikaw, mas shut up
< Anton > : shut up!!!
< Mia > : tumahimik ka!
< Anton > : (umutot)
< Mia > : ano ba---
< Vincent > : Anton, ba't ayaw mo na lang hubarin dito para hindi ka na pagtawanan … pahiramin kita ng damit ko, meron pa kong extra kung gusto mo
< Anton > : huh? hindi pwede … gusto ko sanang tanggalin lahat to pero hindi pwede
< Christoper > : wala naman dito Mommy mo ah, anong kinakatakot mo
< Anton > : may mga wiring yung damit na to, kailangan malapit sa balat ko yung mga sensors
< Mia > : kunwari ka pa, favorite mong damit yan
< Anton > : ang kati nga minsan eh (nagkakamot)
< Vincent > : tulungan kita (kinakamot si Anton)
< Anton > : dito sa likod pare
< Vincent > : dito?
< Christoper > : ... mukhang busy sila ah
< Mia > : Christoper, samahan mo naman kami mamaya ni Ann sa kubeta na may nakakalat na mga tae sa loob
< Christoper > : (awkward face) ba't naman kayo pupunta don?
< Mia > : volunteered journalist kasi ako sa school paper natin, kailangan ko ng article na isusulat
< Anton > : medyo ibaba mo pa pare, yan yan sa likod
< Vincent > : ibaba ko pa? (kinakamot si Anton)
(fading to blackscreen)

--- end of Chapter 41 ---

FOR ALL CHAPTERS
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hahahaha!!! ayus yung kwento
this is not TV! this is DIY

naalala ko yun kaibigan ko na ngayon na sa middle east na fan ng descendents, ramones, face to face, nofx, etc. mahilig sya sa mga kwento. typical mahigit sa lahat entertaining

@delay: maganda kwento mo kaya lang bitin--kulang sa seks en bayolens. dagdagan ng kahit katiting na libog at dugo ;-)

@delay - maganda kung gagawan mo to ng blogspot... para macompile mo mga kwento mo

Short Film Coming : Negative One
" Ang Pagbabalik "
Chapter 42

ANIMAL RIGHTS
PART 2

(showing a fisherman in a ship throws a dynamite in the sea and then, explosion)
(beach side)

< Mia > : ama ko, kailan nyo ba titigilan ang iligal na gawain nyo? bakit hindi nyo po maisip na, mapapadali ang pagkaubos ng mga isda dahil sa winawasak nyo pati tirahan nila, huhuhu
(enter Anton)
< Anton > : anong nangyayari dito?
(enter Christoper)
< Christoper > : nangyayari dito ay ano?
(sound of audience clapping)
< Mia > : huh? sino kayo?
< Anton > : sino kami?
< (close-up) Anton > : ako ang gwapong-gwapong si Anton
< (close-up) Christoper > : at ang mas gwapong si Christoper … ako yun
< Anton and Christoper > : at kami ang …
('explosion!')
(earthquake follows)
< Anton and Christoper > : … BOMBA---!!!
< Mia > : please, kung sino man kayo, pakikumbinsi ang ama ko na, itigil na ang masamang ginagawa nya (nakahawak sa braso ni Anton)
< Anton > : (awkward face) close ba tayo? wag mo kong hawakan (pumalag)
< Mia > : (angry face)
< Anton > : (pinagpagan sarili)
< Christoper > : Detective Anton (nod once)
< Anton > : Detective Christoper (nod once)
< Christoper > : (nod once)
< Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Anton > : (nod once)
(they are now on the ship)
< Christoper > : (nod once)
< Anton > : (nod once)
< Christoper > : (nod once)
< Anton > : (nod once) (and so on...)
< Father > : (awkward face) … papanong nakalangoy kayo dito? hindi man lang nabasa mga damit nyo … sino kayo!?
< (close-up) Anton > : sino kami? (look at the camera) ako ang gwapong-gwapong ...
< Christoper > : Detective Anton! tignan mo, sa dagat!
< Anton > : ..!
(showing fishes that are floating dead on the sea)
< (close-up face) Anton > : walanghiya ka!
(then showing a hand guiding Anton's chin to other direction)
< (close-up face) Anton > : hayop ka!
(showing again a hand guiding Anton's chin to other direction)
< (close-up face) Anton > : isa kang walang puso! pagbabayaran mong lahat-lahat ng mga to!
(normal view)
(Anton is facing Christoper in an angry manner)
< Christoper > : … (then guiding Anton's chin to Mia's father)
< Anton > : narinig mo!? magbabayad ka!
< Father > : ha! yan ang akala ninyo … mga tauhan!

(then a group of fisherman go beside Mia's father)

< Men > : (laughing at Anton)
< Father > : ano nang gagawin nyo ngayon? ha, ahahahaha, ahahahaha...
< Anton > : Detective Christoper, ako nang bahala dito (then humarap sa mga mangingisda … nagbukas ng coat)
< Fishermen > : aah---!!! (nagshield ng mga mata) yak! kadiri!
< Christoper > : good work Detective Anton, ngayon … (nagsindi ng dinamita) tanggapin nyo, sariling bomba nyo! (inihagis sa mga mangingisda)
('explosion!')
(then showing the fishermen … puro maitim na lahat)
< Fishermen > : uh (isa-isang nagtumbahan lahat)
(tapos nang tumawag sa cellphone si Anton)
< Anton > : … pulis na ang bahala sa kanila ngayon Detective Christoper
< Christoper > : napaelib mo ko kanina sayong ginawa Detective Anton, saan mo natutunan yon?
< Anton > : ang alin? eto? (binuksan yung coat nya sa harap ni Christoper)
< Christoper > : …

--- end of Chapter 42 ---

Short Film Coming : Negative One
" Ang Pagbabalik "
Chapter 43

(may malaking salamin si Anton sa loob ng coat)
< Anton > : ginamit ko ang araw para masilaw silang lahat
< Christoper > : ..? (tumingin sa itaas) pero Detective Anton, wala namang araw, sobrang maulap ngayon
< Anton > : ganun ba? siguro'y, napangitan sila sa kanilang mga sarili kaya, nagtakip sila ng mga mata … ang papangit kasi nilang lahat
< Christoper > : as usual isa ka talagang tunay na henyo Detective Anton
< Anton > : alam ko yun Detective Christoper, pero … (tumingin sa dagat) pano na tayo makakaalis sa lugar nato?
< (close-up) Christoper > : Detective Anton
< Anton > : … (tumingin kay Christoper)
< Christoper > : (nod once)
< Anton > : Detective Christoper (nod once)
< Christoper > : (nod once)
< Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up eyes) Anton > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Christoper > : (nod once)
< (close-up face) Anton > : (nod once)
(they are now in the beer house already … a woman is dancing in the background)
< Christoper > : (nod once)
< Anton > : (nod once)
< Christoper > : (nod once then look at the place)
< Anton > : (still nodding to Christoper)
< Christoper > : … Detective Anton
< Anton > : (nod once)
< Christoper > : nandito na tayo
< Anton > : (nod once)
< Christoper > : Detective Anton nandito na tayo!
< Anton > : (nod once)
< Christoper > : (sinampal si Anton) nandito na tayo!
< Anton > : (look at the place) oo nga noh … Detective Christoper! uminom na tayo!
(then three beautiful women na naka-two piece approach them and give them beer)
< Anton > : yeah!
< Christoper > : woo!
(then they toast and drink with the ladies)
(end of film)

(other location)
(temporary subtitle)

FULL MOON
CHANGE OF MEMORY

(inside the kubeta)
(Ann and Christoper is covering their noses)

< Mia > : dito nga
< Christoper > : akala ko gimik lang to ng school para sumikat
< Ann > : walang matinong school ang gagawa ng ganitong advertisement noh!
< Mia > : kailangan kumpirmahin natin muna kung tunay ang mga tae dito
< Ann > : hindi pa ba patunay na mabaho ang …
< Christoper > : (pinigilan si Ann then nod 'no')
< Mia > : (humarap kayla Ann na may tae sa kamay) … okey, titikman ko na
< Ann and Christoper > : (nandiri face)
< Mia > : (kinain yung nasa kamay) … tae nga, tae nga tong mga to
< Christoper > : sa palagay ko, walang ganitong tae ang pusibleng meron sa isang araw lang … baka yang pader lang ang may tunay na mga tae
< Mia > : tama ka, kailangang tikman ko rin ang banda don
< Ann > : Mia!
< Christoper > : (pinigilan ulit si Ann then nod 'no')
< Mia > : (sumalok ng tae sa ibang pader tapos, kinain) … tunay din, tunay din mga tae dito … ngayon, banda don naman
< Ann > : (hinarangan si Mia) Mia tumigil ka na!
< Mia > : umalis ka dyan!!! (tinulak si Ann)
< Ann > : (bagsak sa sahig)
< Christoper > : ..!
< Mia > : (tumakbo sa ibang pader, nilamutak mga tae)

(later … outside the CR)

< Ann > : … hindi ko na talaga alam ang gagawin sa kaibigan kong yon
< Christoper > : … (tumingin sa relos)
(then may lumalabas ng mga tao sa CR)
< Mia > : hindi pa ko tapos! hindi pa ko tapos sabe! kailangan ko pang malaman lahat ng impormasyon sa CR na yan!
(hinihila palabas ng dalawang security guard)
< Mia > : ikaw! (tinuro si Ann) kasalanan mo siguro to noh! kasalanan mong maldita ka! ba't mo sila tinawag ha!? ha!!!
< Ann > : Mia (then iyak, may luha)
< Christoper > : (pinatatahan si Ann) … pakilayo na po yan
< Mia > : ayoko! ayoko!!! bitawan nyo ko!
< Ann > : (umiiyak)
< Mia's voice > : bitawan nyo ko sabe!!! gusto ko pang kumain non!
< Christoper > : kuryentihin yan!
('bzzt---!!!')
< Mia's voice > : aah---!!!

--- end of Chapter 43 ---

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From AUTHOR's Notes

< delay > : hello readers,

Facts About Short Film Coming
# 6 ... here are some of the messages I received so far in the second story up till now

I would like to share my point of view to all of you and feel free to comment more after reading this, taanx

=== Reader's Corner ===

@ SiakniSiak

Quote :

okay

nice lang ba

@ tUs0

Quote :

Kabadingan pala .!

variety of comedy is good...

@ SamLowry

Quote :

W.t.f.i.t.s?

I'll pretend you didn't mean " what the fuc5 is this s#it? "

instead, you just said
Where The Flamingo Is The Source
of this amazing story?

why thank you kind sir ... just click below FOR ALL CHAPTERS

@ Oneiros

Quote :

I am not the TS's agent or editor so I am not obliged to give constructive criticism (for free).

With that said, after 3 chapters, I can honestly say I've read better crap.

ey!

you sons of *****!

just joking ...

well at least your taking notice of my work and I thank you for that you guys

Quote :

We do. It's just that the Networks are more willing to fund the cliched, banal, crap that everyone can relate to rather than taking a risk with those good stories that might not sell as well. That's why I find it great that the digital film boom has empowered indie film makers (with a decent story to tell) to reach a larger audience even with a very low budget.

yeah, I hate cliched stories too you know, and that's why this is my revenge to the society fill with people who makes cliched stories and show it to millions of people ... the shame

cliche stories are gay

Quote :

I am not the TS's agent or editor so I am not obliged to give constructive criticism (for free).

With that said, after 3 chapters, I can honestly say I've read better crap.

the story I've made breaks all the barriers of telling one story, one place, one setting even it's only a one title novel

no my friends, it is super awesome
don't read 3 chapters and then criticize
it's bad ... it's not nice
read the whole novel and then criticize
at least tell me what's really up with my story

that's all
... " just keep your day happy, hmkay "

@ salermo

Quote :

After reading 3 chapters, we might admit being had.

< Christoper > : dalawa na sila delay, baka naman totoo
< delay > : ...

@ sophion

Quote :

we filipinos dont know how to weave a good story.
and our movies suck.

you suck sophion, you suck

@ salermo

Quote :

Whenever I go to get my kare-kare and dinuguan at my nearby little Filipino store and a turo-turo (fingerpoint ) restaurant, I cringe when I hear their overhead T.V. with all the tear-jerkers going-on.

well salermo of not-in-the-philippines, I assume you are in abroad or somewhere, I just can say this that filipinos of wherever you are, are still in touch of their own heritage (you know, even if they suck), and for that I salute them

by the way, my favorite turo-turo ulam is bopis ... have you tried that?

@ Frake_5000

Quote :

mukhang susubaybayan ko na 'to...hehehe! habang binabasa ko yung bawat lines naiimagine ko sa isip ko yung eksena eh. Good work talaga, sir!

actually nasagot ko na tong reply nato dati nung first story pa lang
ito yung naging reply ko...

" gumagawa lang ako ng panibagong approach sa pagbabasa ng novel
nagke-create lang ako ng illusion na parang pinapanood sa screen habang binabasa nga lang ...
gets mo? 'wink' 'wink' "

tapos may nag-reply ... si JosephSensei

Nice story, maari nangyayari ito sa totoong buhay.

@ dark202328

Quote :

ako nga din eh na imagine ko ung habang ginagahasa si brenda

hahahaha! natawa talaga ako sa reply mo

@ dark202328

Quote :

my tanung lang ako, naguguluhan lang ako sa kanila trivor at nelso? sino ba sakanila ang bakla.

ano sila um, discreet, or something ... di ko rin alam eh

actually nakuha ko yung ideya ng profile ni Nelson nung nabasa ko sa TV forum yung salitang bisexual, discreet male only
nung una hindi ko talaga alam ibig sabihin nung salitang discreet
meaning pala non, " maingat "
ang psychology yata nila, straight-acting sila pero mas prefer nila kapwa lalake

@ Frake_5000

Quote :

Ang lupet ng istorya...gusto ko yung ganito. Parating aabangan yung bawat lines. Ibang-iba! Galing mo, sir. Ikaw ba mismo author?

taanx Frake_5000
at yes, me is the author
original at kakaiba ba?

I myself find it very different from anything I've encountered
pero inin-corporate ko lang yung mga napapanood ko sa TV tulad ng southpark

@ mcrory

Quote :

LoL d ko maitindhan anu yan?

its a novel sir
first timer ka pa lang kasi kaya mahirap pa sayo ma-absorb yung contents
pero once nage-gets mo na, you're gonna find yourself laughing mag-isa

its weird kasi nabiktima rin ako

@ -CliFfs|.hEnSki

Quote :

katamad lng basahin lol

pero kung pagtyatyagaan lang daw talaga, its totally worth it
reply ni ... aki^-^

" ahahah.. pinatyagaan ko talagang basahin...hehehehe!! nakakatawa "

@ wardestroyer

Quote :

d nakaka enjoy basahin amf...pero thnx na dn sa effort

ganun ba

@ cock-a-dudle

Quote :

ang haba tapos ang pangit ng font.

kakatamad basahin O_O

naisip ko tuloy na landian at lagyan ng colors mga letra ko pero
ganitong improvement na lang siguro < name > :

" its the content that counts na lang "

@ ~Xylitol~jAm

Quote :

lahat cla cnbi katamad basahin bwahaha

oo nga eh, nakaka-depress

@ wardestroyer

Quote :

isang napakagulong istorya....ngunit talagang magulo

may nakalimutan ka pang word ... magulo sya

@ [eL]Carim

Quote :

1. No one reads it , so why post
2. why do you need to post them in different topic, you can just update it on the first thread

1. meron naman ah, sa 31 hits dati na view at least kalahati non nag-aabang ng next chapter
2. different topic kasi para ma-minimize yung volume ng contents nitong nobela
nakakatamad daw kasi para sa mga baguhan na nagbabasa

@ ~Xylitol~jAm

Quote :

copy paste imba to

( ito yung comment nung nagbabatukan sila Anton at Christoper )

yun kasi yung signature character nila sa video project na yon

@ best_pick

Quote :

wahashahahahahahaha

taanks best pick, nakakatawa ba
mas matatawa ka sa idiniagdag kong character sa nobela, si Lola
keep on reading okay

@ carlporn

Quote :

mabasa nga to minsan

mukang maganda ah

wala bang summary to??

summary nya is umiikot yung istorya sa buhay ng grupo nila Christoper na kumukuha ng college course ng film making ... bukod sa istorya ng mga buhay ng characters, mababasa din yung mga video projects na ginagawa nila as a group

click mo lang yung link sa baba ng FOR ALL CHAPTERS para mabasa mo yung buong istorya

@ darkralf04

Quote :

its kinda cool o_o

parang 2 out of ten?

... meron nga palang hidden facts itong nobela kung bakit hindi nabigyan ng mahusay na hustisya yung mga estudyante na pinatay sa second story
disturbing pero classic case sya ...

@ miss.winter

Quote :

ANU B TOHH??
I DON'T GET IT
SORRY

@ Uruki_takiko

Quote :

...????

....di ko ma gets...

typical love story novels lang kasi nakasanayan nyo kaya medyo nawi-windang kayo sa out of this world kong nobela

@ cutie26

Quote :

,,ano ba yn ang gulo...tpx gnyn pah..xorry sa author pero la nmng kwent ung story tpx bxtos pa...

may kwento kapag binasa ng buo syempre

and for the censory comment, almost wala talagang gumagawa kasi kaya i'm just offering another angle for a variety of readers na gusto ring makabasa sana ng ganitong mga situations

you know in an amateur way

@ ragefire09

Quote :

Pwede!
Tingin ako sa source mo.

taanx ragefire09
taanx din sa 10/10 mo

@ maldita

Quote :

Wow, mukhang maganda ata ito aabangan ko to linggo linggo!

try mo ring basahin yung previous first Chapters
nasa second story na kasi ito eh

... taanx sa pag-read, yaan mo, ga galingan ko pa story nato para mapasaya ikaw

@ kaxcleax73

Quote :

galing mo talaga nakkala ko tagal pa launching now na pala ehehhehe..tagal mag load ng vids binibitin ako heehhehe...

n e wez..congrats sa season 2 ng kwela dyaryo

huh?

kwela nobela kuya hindi kwela dyaryo po, at saka tagal mag-load ng vids?
parang wala yata ako non

... pero taanx sa congrats

@ charlie harper

Quote :

hahahaha!!! ayus yung kwento

ayos ba kuya

@ charlie harper

Quote :

naalala ko yun kaibigan ko na ngayon na sa middle east na fan ng descendents, ramones, face to face, nofx, etc. mahilig sya sa mga kwento. typical mahigit sa lahat entertaining

well hi na rin sa kaibigan mo abroad
... sabihin mo na rin sa kanya, pasalubungan ka ng babae mula abroad

@ NewYorkCubaoHardCorn

Quote :

@delay: maganda kwento mo kaya lang bitin--kulang sa seks en bayolens. dagdagan ng kahit katiting na libog at dugo ;-)

dude good news meron na, read mo Chapter 32 - 35
Terrorism Awareness Part 2
nandon sex and violence mo ... enjoy pare

P.S.
balat ba ng tunay na tao yung maskara mo?
kung oo, pabili ako ng dalawa

@ BongBong

Quote :

@delay - maganda kung gagawan mo to ng blogspot... para macompile mo mga kwento mo

actually meron na, click mo lang yung link below FOR ALL CHAPTERS
dati ginawan ko to ng blogspot sa friendster pero madalas nagloloko
kaya gumawa na lang ako sa free forum ... mabilis at madaling mag-navigate na

i-check mo kuya

@ thomasstuart

Quote :

Hi Dear.

I have recently join this site and this is nice idea for providing us information about Kwela Nobela. Would you mind to let us know more about this? Thanks!

this is a story of fictional situations behind the stepping stones of future film makers
although none of these are real nor based from truth to life people, the concept of this is to extract the humor out of a very very sad topic and turn it into a positive thought that anyone could relate and understand

@ Oneiros

Quote :

Since I'm feeling nice...

My Zen master says that while good art inspires, great art on the other hand offends. So I'm a bit amused by your attempt to satirize/trivialize serious topics like AIDS, cancer, homosexuality, etc. and it reminds me a lot of The Sarah Silverman Program or It's Always Sunny in Philadelphia. However that's where the similarities end. Dialogue is stilted and suffers from unnecessary exposition. Pop-culture references are thrown in with no discernable purpose aside from just being added into the mix. And there seems to be no overarching theme from the few chapters I've read so far, though this isn't that big of a disadvantage if you intended each chapter to be self-contained rather than be part of a coherent whole.

And it goes without saying, if you really believe in your work, edi wag ka masyado mag-paapekto sa iyong mga kritiko. Take whatever you found useful in their criticism and don't take it personally.

since I'm feeling nicer ...

and I don't have a slight idea of what you have said...

but I love the show it's Always sunny in Philadelphia
my favorite episode is when they burned Deandra while saving the kittens, on cam

actually, my inspiration in writing the story is Southpark
I'd like to capture its nastiness at the same time being hilariously funny

and about that coherent whole your talking about,
actually it is divided in a two to three pages of bond paper microsoft office word program ...

Quote :

And training. Everyone needs training.

mukha mo training



# 6b ... after I finished posting the first story, there's this ronwits dude gave me a message that said and I quote " Nice kwento. Love it. Na print ko na chapters nya."

... take that Oneiros!!! in your face! in-your-face
") I have a hardcore fan

plus there's this two other guys that is both curious about me if I'm a scriptwriter or something ... I told them, " no I'm not "

From AUTHOR's Notes

< delay > : hello readers,

Facts About Short Film Coming
# 6 ... here are some of the messages I received so far in the second story up till now

I would like to share my point of view to all of you and feel free to comment more after reading this, taanx

= Reader's Corner =

@ SiakniSiak

Quote :

okay

nice lang ba

@ tUs0

Quote :

Kabadingan pala .!

variety of comedy is good...

@ SamLowry

Quote :

W.t.f.i.t.s?

I'll pretend you didn't mean " what the fuc5 is this s#it? "

instead, you just said
Where The Flamingo Is The Source
of this amazing story?

why thank you kind sir ... just click below FOR ALL CHAPTERS

@ Oneiros

Quote :

I am not the TS's agent or editor so I am not obliged to give constructive criticism (for free).

With that said, after 3 chapters, I can honestly say I've read better crap.

ey!

you sons of *****!

just joking ...

well at least your taking notice of my work and I thank you for that you guys

Quote :

We do. It's just that the Networks are more willing to fund the cliched, banal, crap that everyone can relate to rather than taking a risk with those good stories that might not sell as well. That's why I find it great that the digital film boom has empowered indie film makers (with a decent story to tell) to reach a larger audience even with a very low budget.

yeah, I hate cliched stories too you know, and that's why this is my revenge to the society fill with people who makes cliched stories and show it to millions of people ... the shame

cliche stories are gay

Quote :

I am not the TS's agent or editor so I am not obliged to give constructive criticism (for free).

With that said, after 3 chapters, I can honestly say I've read better crap.

the story I've made breaks all the barriers of telling one story, one place, one setting even it's only a one title novel

no my friends, it is super awesome
don't read 3 chapters and then criticize
it's bad ... it's not nice
read the whole novel and then criticize
at least tell me what's really up with my story

that's all
... " just keep your day happy, hmkay "

@ salermo

Quote :

After reading 3 chapters, we might admit being had.

< Christoper > : dalawa na sila delay, baka naman totoo
< delay > : ...

@ sophion

Quote :

we filipinos dont know how to weave a good story.
and our movies suck.

you suck sophion, you suck

@ salermo

Quote :

Whenever I go to get my kare-kare and dinuguan at my nearby little Filipino store and a turo-turo (fingerpoint ) restaurant, I cringe when I hear their overhead T.V. with all the tear-jerkers going-on.

well salermo of not-in-the-philippines, I assume you are in abroad or somewhere, I just can say this that filipinos of wherever you are, are still in touch of their own heritage (you know, even if they suck), and for that I salute them

by the way, my favorite turo-turo ulam is bopis ... have you tried that?

@ Frake_5000

Quote :

mukhang susubaybayan ko na 'to...hehehe! habang binabasa ko yung bawat lines naiimagine ko sa isip ko yung eksena eh. Good work talaga, sir!

actually nasagot ko na tong reply nato dati nung first story pa lang
ito yung naging reply ko...

" gumagawa lang ako ng panibagong approach sa pagbabasa ng novel
nagke-create lang ako ng illusion na parang pinapanood sa screen habang binabasa nga lang ...
gets mo? 'wink' 'wink' "

tapos may nag-reply ... si JosephSensei

Nice story, maari nangyayari ito sa totoong buhay.

@ dark202328

Quote :

ako nga din eh na imagine ko ung habang ginagahasa si brenda

hahahaha! natawa talaga ako sa reply mo

@ dark202328

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my tanung lang ako, naguguluhan lang ako sa kanila trivor at nelso? sino ba sakanila ang bakla.

ano sila um, discreet, or something ... di ko rin alam eh

actually nakuha ko yung ideya ng profile ni Nelson nung nabasa ko sa TV forum yung salitang bisexual, discreet male only
nung una hindi ko talaga alam ibig sabihin nung salitang discreet
meaning pala non, " maingat "
ang psychology yata nila, straight-acting sila pero mas prefer nila kapwa lalake

@ Frake_5000

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Ang lupet ng istorya...gusto ko yung ganito. Parating aabangan yung bawat lines. Ibang-iba! Galing mo, sir. Ikaw ba mismo author?

taanx Frake_5000
at yes, me is the author
original at kakaiba ba?

I myself find it very different from anything I've encountered
pero inin-corporate ko lang yung mga napapanood ko sa TV tulad ng southpark

@ mcrory

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LoL d ko maitindhan anu yan?

its a novel sir
first timer ka pa lang kasi kaya mahirap pa sayo ma-absorb yung contents
pero once nage-gets mo na, you're gonna find yourself laughing mag-isa

its weird kasi nabiktima rin ako

@ -CliFfs|.hEnSki

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katamad lng basahin lol

pero kung pagtyatyagaan lang daw talaga, its totally worth it
reply ni ... aki^-^

" ahahah.. pinatyagaan ko talagang basahin...hehehehe!! nakakatawa "

@ wardestroyer

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d nakaka enjoy basahin amf...pero thnx na dn sa effort

ganun ba

@ cock-a-dudle

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ang haba tapos ang pangit ng font.

kakatamad basahin O_O

naisip ko tuloy na landian at lagyan ng colors mga letra ko pero
ganitong improvement na lang siguro < name > :

" its the content that counts na lang "

@ ~Xylitol~jAm

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lahat cla cnbi katamad basahin bwahaha

oo nga eh, nakaka-depress

@ wardestroyer

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isang napakagulong istorya....ngunit talagang magulo

may nakalimutan ka pang word ... magulo sya

@ [eL]Carim

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1. No one reads it , so why post
2. why do you need to post them in different topic, you can just update it on the first thread

1. meron naman ah, sa 31 hits dati na view at least kalahati non nag-aabang ng next chapter
2. different topic kasi para ma-minimize yung volume ng contents nitong nobela
nakakatamad daw kasi para sa mga baguhan na nagbabasa

@ ~Xylitol~jAm

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copy paste imba to

( ito yung comment nung nagbabatukan sila Anton at Christoper )

yun kasi yung signature character nila sa video project na yon

@ best_pick

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wahashahahahahahaha

taanks best pick, nakakatawa ba
mas matatawa ka sa idiniagdag kong character sa nobela, si Lola
keep on reading okay

@ carlporn

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mabasa nga to minsan

mukang maganda ah

wala bang summary to??

summary nya is umiikot yung istorya sa buhay ng grupo nila Christoper na kumukuha ng college course ng film making ... bukod sa istorya ng mga buhay ng characters, mababasa din yung mga video projects na ginagawa nila as a group

click mo lang yung link sa baba ng FOR ALL CHAPTERS para mabasa mo yung buong istorya

@ darkralf04

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its kinda cool o_o

parang 2 out of ten?

... meron nga palang hidden facts itong nobela kung bakit hindi nabigyan ng mahusay na hustisya yung mga estudyante na pinatay sa second story
disturbing pero classic case sya ...

@ miss.winter

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ANU B TOHH??
I DON'T GET IT
SORRY

@ Uruki_takiko

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...????

....di ko ma gets...

typical love story novels lang kasi nakasanayan nyo kaya medyo nawi-windang kayo sa out of this world kong nobela

@ cutie26

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,,ano ba yn ang gulo...tpx gnyn pah..xorry sa author pero la nmng kwent ung story tpx bxtos pa...

may kwento kapag binasa ng buo syempre

and for the censory comment, almost wala talagang gumagawa kasi kaya i'm just offering another angle for a variety of readers na gusto ring makabasa sana ng ganitong mga situations

you know in an amateur way

@ ragefire09

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Pwede!
Tingin ako sa source mo.

taanx ragefire09
taanx din sa 10/10 mo

@ maldita

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Wow, mukhang maganda ata ito aabangan ko to linggo linggo!

try mo ring basahin yung previous first Chapters
nasa second story na kasi ito eh

... taanx sa pag-read, yaan mo, ga galingan ko pa story nato para mapasaya ikaw

@ kaxcleax73

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galing mo talaga nakkala ko tagal pa launching now na pala ehehhehe..tagal mag load ng vids binibitin ako heehhehe...

n e wez..congrats sa season 2 ng kwela dyaryo

huh?

kwela nobela kuya hindi kwela dyaryo po, at saka tagal mag-load ng vids?
parang wala yata ako non

... pero taanx sa congrats

@ charlie harper

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hahahaha!!! ayus yung kwento

ayos ba kuya

@ charlie harper

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naalala ko yun kaibigan ko na ngayon na sa middle east na fan ng descendents, ramones, face to face, nofx, etc. mahilig sya sa mga kwento. typical mahigit sa lahat entertaining

well hi na rin sa kaibigan mo abroad
... sabihin mo na rin sa kanya, pasalubungan ka ng babae mula abroad

@ NewYorkCubaoHardCorn

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@delay: maganda kwento mo kaya lang bitin--kulang sa seks en bayolens. dagdagan ng kahit katiting na libog at dugo ;-)

dude good news meron na, read mo Chapter 32 - 35
Terrorism Awareness Part 2
nandon sex and violence mo ... enjoy pare

P.S.
balat ba ng tunay na tao yung maskara mo?
kung oo, pabili ako ng dalawa

@ BongBong

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@delay - maganda kung gagawan mo to ng blogspot... para macompile mo mga kwento mo

actually meron na, click mo lang yung link below FOR ALL CHAPTERS
dati ginawan ko to ng blogspot sa friendster pero madalas nagloloko
kaya gumawa na lang ako sa free forum ... mabilis at madaling mag-navigate na

i-check mo kuya

@ thomasstuart

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Hi Dear.

I have recently join this site and this is nice idea for providing us information about Kwela Nobela. Would you mind to let us know more about this? Thanks!

this is a story of fictional situations behind the stepping stones of future film makers
although none of these are real nor based from truth to life people, the concept of this is to extract the humor out of a very very sad topic and turn it into a positive thought that anyone could relate and understand

@ Oneiros

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Since I'm feeling nice...

My Zen master says that while good art inspires, great art on the other hand offends. So I'm a bit amused by your attempt to satirize/trivialize serious topics like AIDS, cancer, homosexuality, etc. and it reminds me a lot of The Sarah Silverman Program or It's Always Sunny in Philadelphia. However that's where the similarities end. Dialogue is stilted and suffers from unnecessary exposition. Pop-culture references are thrown in with no discernable purpose aside from just being added into the mix. And there seems to be no overarching theme from the few chapters I've read so far, though this isn't that big of a disadvantage if you intended each chapter to be self-contained rather than be part of a coherent whole.

And it goes without saying, if you really believe in your work, edi wag ka masyado mag-paapekto sa iyong mga kritiko. Take whatever you found useful in their criticism and don't take it personally.

since I'm feeling nicer ...

and I don't have a slight idea of what you have said...

but I love the show it's Always sunny in Philadelphia
my favorite episode is when they burned Deandra while saving the kittens, on cam

actually, my inspiration in writing the story is Southpark
I'd like to capture its nastiness at the same time being hilariously funny

and about that coherent whole your talking about,
actually it is divided in a two to three pages of bond paper microsoft office word program ...

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And training. Everyone needs training.

mukha mo training



# 6b ... after I finished posting the first story, there's this ronwits dude gave me a message that said and I quote " Nice kwento. Love it. Na print ko na chapters nya."

... take that Oneiros!!! in your face! in-your-face
") meron akong hardcore fan

plus there's this two other guys that is both curious about me if I'm a scriptwriter or something ... I told them, " no I'm not "

cheers for that!

ADMIN,

what if I will make an update?
how will I edit the contents and title?

delay wrote:

dude good news meron na, read mo Chapter 32 - 35
Terrorism Awareness Part 2
nandon sex and violence mo ... enjoy pare

P.S.
balat ba ng tunay na tao yung maskara mo?
kung oo, pabili ako ng dalawa

ok will do. tuloy-tuloy lang ang pagtipa sa kibord. tuloy-tuloy lang ang pagsulat.
wag mabahala sa mga kritiko. bahagi yan ng pagkatha. parte yan ng kahit anong sining.
masanay ka na.

since nasimulan mo na seks en bayolens, ibaon mo pang lalo (ang cutter o finger sa balat)--try mo mag-transgressive fiction

and speaking of balat, balat ng isang tarantadong mayor sa maguindanao yan! balat ng putanginang si ampatuan!

wala pa ring masbu-burat, este, masbu-brutal sa tunay na buhay. life imitates art (and vice versa)